I have revised my query...once again! I've received a lot of feedback from other writers on different blogs/contests etc. on my old query and this is what I've come up with. Let me know what you think...
Query for IGNITE:
Competitive swimmer Alison Summers should be back home in Nevada celebrating her seventeenth birthday at the pool with her best friend—not running from her grandma’s killers. But no one, including her family, believes Ali’s story anyway. Not once the autopsy determines the cause of death is cancer, not murder, and she’s branded with PTSD. No one except WitWatch—a top-secret and experimental branch of the Witness Protection Program operated by agents with supernatural abilities.
But, Ali’s not crazy, and she’ll prove it. To expose the killers, she must trust a fire-wielding Watcher with a classified past. Only Agent William Reed is keeping deeper secrets: like his ability to transfer thoughts into her mind. Following an attack by discharged Watchers, Will mysteriously disappears leaving her doubting his alliance. Discovering she's been injected with a supernatural antigen, Ali uses her ability to manipulate water and tracks down Will and a link to who killed her Gram. But that’s not all she finds: a rouge Watcher with an antibody to eliminate supernatural powers has resurfaced. And Ali’s next on his to-cure list. Now, Ali needs to decide if the world is better off with or without her kind. But either choice may lead to losing someone she loves.
Written from the point-of-view of an unreliable narrator, IGNITE is a 65,000 word YA Urban Fantasy with romantic and suspenseful twists that will appeal to readers who enjoyed Kelly Armstrong’s DARKEST POWERS trilogy.